Descriptive Writing

This week for literary Mrs Clark gave us a picture of a creepy hallway with a chair in the
middle of the room and we had to write a descriptive story using verbs, nouns, adverbs
and adjectives. We had to make the story so our reader could imagine the picture.
I really enjoyed doing this activity because it was really fun picture to write about
considering it was school work.

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

Adjectives	Nouns	Verbs	Adverbs
Abandoned	House	Dark	Roting
Old	dead	Silent	Meaningly
frightened	zombie	Scary	Ferociously

One sunny day me and my brother went on a long breath

taking  walk.As we walked far in we see a old house my brother

quietly whispered in my ear and said lets go i agreed but it

started pouring down with rain. Home was way too far away so

i said let's stay so we quickly ran towards the house it looked

like it had been abandoned!! for years we tried knocking but it

was dead silent.we looked around looking for ways to get in  and

as we were about to give up we see a window but it was closed

so we quickly grabbed a old rotten wood and angrly smashed!!

the window and hoped in side and we hear something loudly

coming towards us and it was a mouse and he said scaredy

cat meaningly and then we hear something else it was louder

and you can hear it thumping down on the old creaking wood  

so we hide and it's a zombie that's right a angry hungry zombie

that looks like it hasn't eaten in years so we frighteningly!!! hide

with fear and my brother says what do we do i was so frightened

i couldn't say a thing.I look for something to defend myself with

but then i see a eye pop up between the old cracked open wood

and i scream ferociously!! and we run and i look back he's gone

so i look back again and bang there he is and then i wake up

and find out its a dream and we open the curtain and it's a bright

sunny day and me and my brother go on a long walk and as we

walked far in we see a house and i scream and run away as fast

as i can dun dun duuuuuuun!!!!! the end.

Self assess

I think I have done good because I have included all my adverbs nouns verbs and adverbs. I think next I could work on making it have more exclamation marks and make it more interesting.

Peer assessment

I like how you use great descriptive vocabulary because it painted an amazing picture in my head. For example old creaking wood

Also in the story your example how the crates fell and angrily smashed!!

Next time you could make sure you use capitals letters for example you need to use a capital I for the story and at the start of the story.

Descriptive writing

This week for literary Mrs Clark gave us a picture of two
boats and we had to write a disruptive story using verbs
nouns adverbs and additives and make a story about the
pitcher .I really enjoyed doing this activity it was really
fun considering it was school work.

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our  readers

Adjectives	Nouns	Adverbs	verbs
broken	War	loudly	Crashing
Abandoned	Land	Silent	Sunken
	Wood	whispering	Smashed

My paragraph

One horrible day it was world war one with ships all around broken
abandoned with planes crashing loudly. Your lucky if you even made it to
land one day it  is loud and the next it's dead silent with people rotting  and
it's only been a week and while you walk thro the forest you can hear the dead
whispering telling you to run hide And most commonly !!! LEAV !!!  grand dad
is this all true yes do you know who the that was in the story who ME the END.

descriptive writing

this week we have been working on our descriptive writing it was fun and as you can see here this is the descriptive writing i did if you can see or read it hope you liked it.